This WAS good, even if u don't think so. i think it improved throughout, i don't know why but i have something against "porcelain" in poems cuz it's so overused on this start (that's my only criticism) however i thought the ending was so effective well done!!

Wow that was sooo amazing.. thats how i feel. how crazy.. ne wyas htis is such an amazing poem. i loved every single line. i wish i could write like this. u have so much talent so keep on writing. i loved it.. great job
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luve angie

You are a good writer. Keep it up. This poem is full of emotions,very descriptive. It's great! Anyway, thanks for commenting on my work, "I USED TO". It really means a lot to me. :)

I thought it was good. It sounded just like a rhyming story with so much vivid descriptions, I love the story too, it was good. Your way of writing is quite good.

Wow! really thought provoking! loved it! keep it up ;-D