"Bloody eyes,
Crying bloody tears,
Unhealed scars,
Scream to be healed.

Hollow eyes,
Nothing there,
Trying to find a scrape of emotion,
Nothing there."

OMG i love those 2 stanzas! i loved it! keep up the good work. 5/5!

Mm, I loved this. It is simple, and yet complex. It engages the mind and the heart into it's easily flowing words. A truly astonishing piece. I tried to pick a favorite stanza or couplet, but am unable to do so. If I had to however, I must say the last line "I'm just so far away" holds a lot of meaning in so few words. That line honestly sums up this piece beautifully, and I can relate to it. Thank you, so much for your comment. It was much appreciated. [and yes... I am 13 :)] Best wishes and Blessed be.

Mm, I loved this. It is simple, and yet complex. It engages the mind and the heart into it's easily flowing words. A truly astonishing piece. I tried to pick a favorite stanza or couplet, but am unable to do so. If I had to however, I must say the last line "I'm just so far away" holds a lot of meaning in so few words. That line honestly sums up this piece beautifully, and I can relate to it. Thank you, so much for your comment. It was much appreciated. [and yes... I am 13 :)] Best wishes and Blessed be.

Oh My Gosh!
I lovedd it!
The ending especially.

There was just one thing I didn't like too well..
ONLY ONE! ( That's rare )

'Blackened midnight,
No stars in the black world'

I don't like how you go.. 'Blackened' And, Then use.. 'black world.'
I think another word to descirbe world would have been better. :|

But you did an amazing job, and that still fits perfectly in the poem.
:] Great Job. 5/5

Ii FREAKING LOVE iiT! 5/5. SUCH A GREAT HEARTFELT EMOTiiON THAT YOU CAN EXPRESS SO DAMN WELL! i LOVE YOUR POETRY~!!

This was brilliant. You aimed for something mysterious and that's exactly what you got. I thought everything about this poem was wonderful and you are an awesome poet!

Astryd

This was brilliant. You aimed for something mysterious and that's exactly what you got. I thought everything about this poem was wonderful and you are an awesome poet!

Astryd

Opps. i did it here again too. my apologies

Wow! This was an amazing piece. I loved every word of it. Though a perticular stanza stood out to me...

"Bloody eyes,
Crying bloody tears,
Unhealed scars,
Scream to be healed."

That was my favorite.

The whole poem was beautifully written and flowed really well. 5/5

marcella

I've read this.
Doubt I commented it though.

I loved the emotion in it, hun.
You should start using this kind of emotion in ALL of your poems. :]
Though most have it. I"ve read a few in the past that don't.

Loved it.
Keep up the good work. :]
5/5

Very good poem it was mysterous just like you wanted it to be i liked it a lot keep it up ur a great writer 5/5