Desired love

by RJ   Jan 22, 2007


Is it true love
or plain stupidity?

Hoping that one day
youll marry me.

Together, We'll start
a family.

Is it all a dream
Or some fantasy?

Youre breaking my heart
with all your uncertainty.

Youre wanting to leave
but unable to set me free.

i sit here waiting
for you patiently.

Just listen to your heart
and face reality.

That you and me are meant
to be...

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  • 15 years ago

    by H E Losey

    I can understand the writing from the "heart" but this does not often make for the best poetry.
    I would be sure the word "I" is capitalized.
    I would check all my spelling/punctuation..."you'll"
    The thing that seperates poetry from rhyming prose is the metre/rhythm which is to me in need of some work. Poetry needs to flow continually.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Awww... this is really sweet! i love your wording and it flows really well!! great job! 5/5

    Forever*Yours

  • 17 years ago

    by ALEX

    The style was a new one for me, and i liked it a lot. The rhymes were awesome. And you obviously feel pretty strongly about this person. Great poem & keep writing.
    -Parker

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Really got flow and so beatifully written,keep it up,5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Mm. that reminded me of people i love dearly.

    well anyway, that was really nice. keep up the great work.

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