Jessica

smashing.......

u r becoming my favourite day by day..

keep up the good work

This is an interesting piece, because you combine the elements of death, sadness, but also love. That is an interesting way to present the concept you had. Descriptive and full of emotion this is a nice piece. I like these lines, and also the metaphor that is implied by them. [or rather the metaphor that came to me]

"Open your eyes she says to me
But I take no notice to her pleads
As I walk and fall into the sea"

Overall a very nice piece. Thank you so much for your comment on my poem, it was very much appreciated. What you said was interesting, and I will definitely think about it. Best wishes, and blessed be. *Athame