This poem was so brilliant. I know exactly how I feel when you know you have so much to live for...but you just don't feel like holding on. Amazing the way you captured the feeling so well. 5/5

~jas~

Alot of emotin in this poem. Keep writing. Good job!

Great pome.. i dont think you should change it at all !! i really like it ..

I loved it!! Great emotion! I don't think you should change it either. A lot of people do feel like that! Once again. Great poem! 5/5
~Shae

That is a nice poem... I totally know what you mean.

Some people feels that way at times...Check out my poem...

Well excelent.... u dont have 2 edit this think about the others some of they can relate... your poetry is 2 express ur feeling but some how u have 2 do it 4 ur visitors or readers (dont follow wat i said just follow wat u feel)

Very well !!!
Good Job !!!!
Your poem is beutifull !!!!
I love it !!!!
leo

I have never read anything that describes exactly what I am feeling and going through. OMG!

Omg ur poem is so cute...in a sad wayy keep it up!

UMMMMMM.....

Wow great poem...comment back when you get a chance!

5/5
really... really... really... great poem!!!

conveys exactly what i feel!

nice!

...kaila

Excellent staff! u jst expressed the way i sometimes feel. my hope is Jesus though......

Nice, I could sense your words and their meaning. Keep up the prose and remember to be one with your poem. If it is real you’ll be able to feel it breath and its heart to beat. A poem is a fragment of time, a sliver of emotion trapped in our hearts and set free upon the page. Where it can finally sore and fly with other poems or cry and weep with other broken hearts. Poetry is nothing more than emotion set in motion. Poetry is seldom more than the small fossil that waits within the stone begging for someone to chip it free, and then to wonder how it came to be.

Keep up your good works. May your poems be a great frame for your emotion’s. May there be peace and love in your life. And may the mark you make upon those hearts around you be filled with joyous fragments of your own heart.

Wha chu mean you dont like it? i think its pretty good

I'm constantly masked in sadness
And the pain is the only thing real.

Thats a great ending to that poem, i think you could shorten a couple of the lines though but you know what i'm like at sayin that haha.
You should start giving me titles and see how mine turn out, aslong as you promise not to laugh lol