This was truly beautful. And I thought it was very interesting how at first you said that you find deception and lies. Very cool coming FROM a girl, lol. And I loved the line about the face of a boy that once made her whole. Really great phrasiology. You are very talented! Great job and keep it up! :)
~Midnight Sun

Deep, and straight to the point. You've got talent, and it's well spent in style and rhyme. Great job.

Could i say absolutly amazing. it is so true and really no one ever looks deep down in a girl to see what they are all about they look at the outside and sees her smiling but really they don't know it sometimes a fake. keep the work up you sure have a future in all this. 5/5 as always and i would give you like 99999/5 but thats over 5 haha.
xx.chelseaa.xx

ps. thanks for the sweet comment i wrote that poem quickly its just how i was feeling at the moment but thanks so much hun.

Wow hun. Thats quite a deep poem and i loved the flow to it as always.
In answer to your comment, i know this may hurt hun, but if your friend knew that you loved Jake so much and is still saying yes, she's not a real friend. A real friend would not say yes to the guy who broke her best friends heart. She'd tell him where to go =(
5/5 as always
*Gem*