Comments : Wolf

  • 17 years ago

    by Oceansoul

    Well written poem, a small story well told, jus the sentence "My eyes widen as I realize what happened" seem to me a bit long compared to the rest, so it stops the flow a bit , i think in my opinion that if that sentence would be a bit shorter and ended with a stressed syllable instead of an unstressed, it would make the poem a great deal better
    keep the writting up :)

  • 17 years ago

    by shatteredsoul

    Wolves are my #1 favorite animal, so i realy loke this poem!
    check out mine if ya want.