Fava

I read this almost like a song, emphasizing Fava in each stanza...this is really good. You told a story in the lines, and did it beautifully. And I also like how you went gradually from the fun and happy memories, to his sad end.

powerful stuff, you're a great writer

Tripp

Wow. i'm breathless and in pain. my sunburn hurts from the goosebumps. that's truely beautiful. i can only wish i had a grandfather like that. instead i have 1 who is dead (he was nevr like that) and one who is nealy blind and deaf. he's dieing slowly. no one can truely fully relate to this poem because they don't have that same connection. it's hard for me to explain. all i know is that it is a wonderful poem. u should read it out at the funeral. so many people would love to hear it. i'm here for u to talk to aswell dom. 5/5.
love u always,
Willow xxooxxoo

Wow that was such a sad poem. it brought tears to my eyes... literally. this is such a greatly written poem. u have alot of talent. u r deffinately one of my favorites. keep up the great work
take care
luve angie