Never Give Up

by Bridget   Jan 25, 2007


An ocean of heat blasts over her,
and lingers on her for too long.
She falls to the ground in surprise and shock,
and immediately feels something is wrong.

Breaking out in a sweat,
she tries to fight this body of heat.
But she can only struggle as she gets slowly weaker,
and face this powerful defeat.

Her body goes limp with exhaustion,
and her head lolls about on her neck.
She's drowning in a pool of her own sweat,
but her closing eyes it won't affect.

Her lids are slowly shutting,
her dark lashes and brow soaking wet.
The last thing she sees is a blurry mess,
then she is gripped by a feeling she won't forget.

Eventually she wakes up, in a wave of confusion,
and she doesn't know where she is.
Her body is sore, and her clothes stuck to her skin,
and her damp hair is in a frizz.

She manages to stand, with a bit of swaying,
and she realizes her enemy's no longer there.
The sweltering heat has gone and left her to be,
but has left her alone in fear.

Looking around, she only sees paths,
there's hundreds of them all around.
But which one should she take, where do they lead to?
Should she wait till the right one is found?

She chooses one at random,
and walks up to the start.
But something monstrously scary appears,
and tries to stab her in the heart.

She stops abruptly and runs back,
her heart thumping out of her chest.
She turns and tries another path,
but these things won't give her a rest.

She doesn't lose hope and keeps trying,
how is she managing to cope?
Finally there is only one path left,
this path is her only hope.

She closes her eyes and walks towards it,
saying a silent prayer in her head.
She keeps walking, finally opening her eyes,
to see safety lying ahead.

Never give up hope, even in the worst of times,
and always keep trying your hardest.
Because giving up on these things -
is like giving up on yourself.

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  • 17 years ago

    by robin milford

    Another excellent poem the last stanza is indeed powerful your poem is very detailed and paints a picture that noone else could paint.

  • 17 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Fantastic. Wow this poem was really strong.Like other I too think the end stanza was powerful.
    Your detail definitly paints a picture.
    Keep it up.
    Elaine

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Never give up hope, even in the worst of times,
    and always keep trying your hardest.
    Because giving up on these things -
    is like giving up on yourself. "

    I thought the ending stanza was very powerful. The whole poem was very chilling and almost like a horror film but the ending held a strong message to the reader and held a note of hope.
    The only thing i can suggest is to try and keep the length of the lines in each stanza consistent so that the rhythm stays the same.
    But the poem was brilliant anyway =)5/5
    *Gem*

    (Comment Two)

  • 17 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Wow. great great great poem! loved the detailing so much! it really painted a picture. wow. 5/5 for sure. keep up the great work:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Colby

    REALLY GOOD. I like it alot.... 5/5