I liked the flow with the "aabb"-style. Nice rhyming as well, it didn't look forced. Use of words was good. Yeah, it was a good poem. :-)

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

Woah. BriBri. This was so amazing. You're effin' great. I love the way you wrote this...you didn't use all this crazy stuff about it actually happening...you know what i'm trying to say? Lol. It just flowed so nicely. This was great...sad...but great. I love it!

-` Glenduh.

This was amazing. It was well put together. Very powerful choice of words and though it's very sad you wrote it beautifully.

cella

5/5

This was so amazing. You're great. I love the way you wrote this.The imagery was clear and meaningful.I liked the rhyme scheme because it added great flow to the poem.I also like how it's short, but it tells of so much pain. great great great,
nessa