Needs alot of work. Put more emotion and grip the readers attention. I gave u a 1 because that was horrid.

Nice style. different. You make it seem like such a small plea but then again its not. a truly unique poem. U have different writing styles on your poems that i really like. I'm gonna read more. 5/5

"Why...don't you love me?
Why, do you hurt me?"

The commas and periods are not needed.

"I love you
I love you
I love you"

and

"I will never hurt you
I will never hurt you"

You don't need the repetition. The phrase comes across just as nicely when you say it once.

I enjoyed your latest one much more.

Love it

Love it

Wow. the emotionput into that poem was really strong. it hurts to long for someone who doesnt care too much for you back. but ull make it through.

Theres so much emotion in this, its great that you can get all your feelings out into poems!! it flows really well too. great job, ur an amazing writer!

Forever*Yours

Well, it seems like a coincidence coz my ex-boyfriend's name was also jake..and i also felt the same thing as you..mmm..let's juz see the better side of life...y waste our time to someone hu doesn't really deserve us?..it's their lost anyways, not ours...go girl..._r",)

Hey this is so nice i really like it i gotta add you to my favorite if i already dont have you on there so yea read some of my stuff and add me to yours if you like them! Love always

Monica aka Mika

Good words 2 express ur feelings!!!

The starting really gets you to read the rest of the poem, so that at the start is well done.

5/5. the wording is great!

David

Amazing! i really really liked it. diffenitely an inspiration...

I feel the same with this guy i have liked since the 7th grade....
love the poems...alot...

This rox!! keep them comin!!

~shanny~

Pure poetry... im surprised that you have a 3.9 on this poem!? it should be a 5.0! I LOVED this one.. my fav! it reminded me of Shakespeare, like romeo and juliet kind of stuff.... awesome! beautiful just beautiful 5/5

Oh my gosh i have goosebumps... the simplicity of the words and structure put so much focus on what your really trying to say.. the emotion is so strong and every repeated line screams that... no suggestions... i am schocked... the rating is a 3.9 and i did not expect such a beautiful poem... i`ll vote 5 to help you out because i LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem :D

Hey i love your poem, it says a lot

Excellent, so full of passion and love. The flow was great and the style was nice. Great job.

Well done..nice work :)

It's funny how such a simple poem can grab so much attention!