Well done Tammie, I enjoyed reading this one, the positive ending was great.
keep writing.
love Tara-Kay
xx

If only it was...
This was good, you used good language, and most of it was original. Also some of the images you created gave an emotional but vivid impact.

I felt though in the beggining it took a few stanzas to get the flow and rhythm going. I found I didn't read fluently until about the fifth stanza, the third stanza was the biggest culprit because of the wordiness of it.

I liked the ending message though, it incorperated the title well to finish the poem strongly.

Overall, enjoyable and emotional write, just has a couple of flow issues.

There's always the hope that tomorrow will be better... I really liked this poem and the hope at the end... Very nicely written as always hun... Well done 5/5 xx

Very powerful stuff, considering you hardly rythme at all and the point comes across twice as strong because of that shows true talent! Excellent!!!! =) 5/5

Whoa this poem has intertwined emotion and contriversy. the rhyming was excellent. i expect nothing less from you, cause you are simply a great poet!

5/5 always David

Oh my god... I love this poem so much. The story and meaning to it so unreal. Extremely powerful.

Well done!!......just great n the flow was perfect..n it held soo much of beauty n hope...well said....powerful!...
Amazing work!
Kp it up!
xxPoojaxx

This one I REALLY liked! My only hope for tomarrow is that it will be easier... I enjoyed reading this.

5/5
Ravyn