That was well written. The emotion was felt through the words and the flow from line to line was particulary good. I enjoyed this very much.

Nicely done. You tell us a bit too much, as in "Your eyes are red and swollen from the night that you just spent crying" We can guess at that. The visuals are there, without all the wordiness

This was beautifully written and composed in a way that few can achieve.Keep up the good work. 5/5 ;)