I've read both of them, it's hard to pick a favourite... but both of them are very good. I loved the last lines... brillent!
Thank you so much for the lovely comment you gave me, I shall keep your advice, thank you.xxx

Well, I wasn't really feeling this poem to be honest. I kinda forced myself to read it. The flow, to me, wasn't very good.. and the depth seemed forced. Just my opinion though. Better luck next time. 3.5/5

Oh, by the way. I don't place my vote where it asks to.. I just put it in the comment, so no need to worry.

I really felt this poem - it's not like anything I usually read here at p&q. This one was more meaning behind and that I like!

1^I must disagree - I think the flow was ok.

The visual set-up was good as well.

Anyways - this was a good piece of work. Keep it up!

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

Okay.. so to be totally honest.. this is a really great poem.. i disagree i think the flow is fine and its a beautiful poem.. the depth of it does seem a little forced.. but i still really like this poem.. great job!

Your writing is so unique and i feel that makes you stand out as a poet. the way this poem ended was amazing. it made me want to read more! wonderful job, keep up the superb work. 5/5

I very much enjoy the odd sense of words. I mean odd as in, not seen so often, but a joy to come upon on occasion. I think you've got great talent, and could make something out of this. People wouldn't get bored of reading it. :)

Very interesting! But in a good way of course! I've never read anything like this before! It was just pure originality, I love that about your poems! Lots of poems seem to look the same after a while..but yours definitely broke that trend! THANK YOU! 5/5

Another absoultely wonderful poem, really truly wonderful. i didn't really get it all that much, i'm sure if i sat down and really read into it i'd get it, but it was truly deep, you have outstanding talent, great job! 5/5 again, of course