The Vicious Cycle

Wow great job. my poems are not t.m.i. they get the point across in a more vivid way. and im writing a book, so there has to be some real intreasting parts. and its not my fault for black and white... lol. i have that pic up on my wall still. well going to work. bii.
~TheQuestioner
p.s. miss talking to you.
p.s.s. dont be haten on my poetry cuz its detailed. lol.

Simple yet effective, although it was challenging to keep up with which body was going what...lol.
I guess the message is you become somebody in love, and nobody alone...and the person you love is everybody...
It was different an certainly a teaching poem.
Only thing I can suggest is punctuation, it always helps.
Thanks for sharing.

Wow, I liked this. It was more of a story than I poem to me but enjoyed it nonetheless. I holds a lot of truth in its words. *5/5*