Great poem.great use of vocabulary,imagery,rhyme and description.work on the structure a bit and u'll be near perfect.

Reading your poem is like listenint to the
story teller..it is indeed very descriptive with
images that are vivid! Enjoyed the read :)

Wow! Just read your profile - for someone who claims not to be a writer you must be crazy. Your poetry is amazing. Full of vivid emotions and raw beauty. If I had discovered this earlier I would definitely have nominated it. You have a wonderful talent and shouldn't undersell yourself. Milly x

this is very nice Milo. :)