Wow.. i like htis poem alot.. kay well my vocabulary sucks so some parts were a little hard to understnad but wow.. amazing write.. beautifully written..

This was very well put together and your word choice was superb. i do not believe i have read a poem like this one, and i must say that the originality of it makes me enjoy it more. 5/5

Oohhh loved it! I love the whole "scene" idea, that just made the poem ten times better in my opinion. It really just shows the wonderful individuality of this piece. I just seemed as if you painted a picture with words. One big masterpiece...loved it!!! 5/5

You play with words and create something unique! I struggled as well with understanding it; mostly because I don't got english as my main language - lol.

Anyways - you got something special and you know how to use it. Keep it up!

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror.

Beautifull poem.thanx for your comment and advice.im doing a poetry course so im still learning xhaha

I enjoyed reading this. I loved the originality. I'm not sure I understand it completely but, it's a very well written piece.

marcella

Great job!!! i love!!!!

I really like this poem. i expecially how you like played it out. how you took something so real and made it understandable and made more understandable. if you know why im trying to say.. anywhoo great job. and in my poem how i put the "&&" in it. i just did that because i like the way it looks. your not literally supposed to say and and. your supposed to just say it once. lol thanks for the CC :D

Wow. That was brilliant! It seemed to me as a very intense poem. Very unique, and marvelous. I love your writing so far. It's this whole new level. I feel unworthy. HAHA.

Clutching pity like a prize to her side.
[[I loved this line. How true it stands!]]

Your writing baffles me. I'm usually very strict and critizing, but I find nothing to improve; just keep writing. You're words are amazing.
I would be interested to see you write in a structed form [though most rhyme].. So, if you attempt one, find me, I'd love to see what you can come up with.
Your pieces are brilliant and well thought out; you have the mind of a god for poetry.
Keep it up; I'll certainly be checking up on you. Keep me interested, and thank you for sharing.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

To me this poem is about destiny, but i could be mistaken, i love the way you make complicated words into complex structures, another 5/5!!!