I love the word selection. And how it shows she trusted him with her heart and he shattered it. That happens quite a lot!! 5/5

~Shae

Ooh!! i've felt like this once... it sucked, but it'll pass, trust me!!! but great job with this, i like poems that i can relate to!! 5/5!

Forever*Yours

Hey this has some great rhyming words.

i loved the way you set it out. 5/5

david

I thought it was good, I'm not quite sure of a tune for this, there were a few things I would have personally changed, but this could work well for you if you have something in mind. It had some good meaning to it. And a lot of people can definitely relate, so for that, good stuff.

I can totally see this as a song. keep it up, cuz if you write all your songs like this, you're going somewhere. i'll be your groupie.lol

That is a really great song. i love it!!

I love it!! And i'm sry ur heart is broken. Mine is 2. :(

Wow this is really good! I loved the emotion everything was so strong and intense! I love writing lyrics and obviously youve got a gift 5/5
*kaila*

Haha, good poem. I tried to sing it but it wasn't quite flowing in everyspot, but you know song's are always interpreted differently. 5/5

Another well written piece. i'm not sure I can really see it as a song, but that's just me. Though as a poem it's wonderful. 5/5

marcella

This was good I loved the way it flowed nice work