A Coma In-Between

by The Queen of Spades   Jan 29, 2007


I wish we could fall into a coma
Sink into the center of the earth
Back to the wombs of the beginning
Where we were first given birth

I wish dawn would never come
That the sun would always be set
And our hearts would conjoin
Like lovers who have just met

I wish all breathing stood still
And all the world would be quiet
That there could be no sound
Against it all, we'd defy it

I wish I could capture the essence
Of life, water, dirt, and air
Along with the understanding of all
Justice, peace, pain, unfair

I wish we could open our eyes
And simply see straight ahead
Rise from the center of the earth
Somewhere between alive and dead

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  • 16 years ago

    by Michael

    Great poem. Its really unique, it got me thinking.

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Wow! Beautiful poem! I love it! You did an awesome job on this! Very powerful and unique...keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, very powerful poem, truly greatly written. The flow is excellent, and the wording is also very good.
    My favorite stanza is:
    -I wish I could capture the essence
    Of life, water, dirt, and air
    Along with the understanding of all
    Justice, peace, pain, unfair-

    I like the imagery that you created very much, it is captivating.
    Keep up, 5/5 from me

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, this wasn't a very intensely written dark poem. I didn't get the chills I would normally get, but there was still some darkness within this one. It seemed more like a cold, calm tone, which is a bit different, but I liked it. So well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    This poem is very well written.
    5/5
    take care.

    ~Chelsea

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