Comments : Fake

  • 17 years ago

    by Laybelled with a name

    Wow! Thats really good! My favourite lines where ""yes" i lie
    because i can't tell them how i really feel inside,"
    And I also liked "cause they only like me, because they think i'm fun
    a girl who laughs all the time,
    is smiling and dumb
    they don't know what is inside, of this black heart of mine
    and if i told them,
    they would draw a line"
    I can really relate to it! Well done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Nix

    I like the topic and you described emotions excellently, I know how you fell with fake friends around your self. You have few mistakes in this one, you used words:-I-understand-feel-because-inside-too- two or more times and that destroys flow. Anyway great poem with really good and original topic!