by Katlynn Jan 30, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
All the problems in my head float. |
by Ike Dizzle
Very good poem. You are a very gifted writer. 5/5 |
I liked the first few stanzas for the form. You made your first point in 5 lines, and went to 4. Then you made a Dramatic change of words in your second 5 line stanza, but you seemed like you got tired of writing and just threw some words together in a few lines so you could end it. It was still good meaning though |
by xX-jess-Xx
Its sad but really makes you think. I really liked it! |
Dark. depressing, but really well written. youve managed to catch the emotion excelently. congrats |
Beautifully written. Dark yet you made your point across in a lovely way...your a very talented writer, so keep it up! |