Sailing like a boat

by Katlynn   Jan 30, 2007


All the problems in my head float.
on the water sailing like a boat.
my tears come down finally.
sick of feeling and thinking like this.
what can i say it's bull.shi.t

my heart is pounding a minute.
ahead of your own lips of kissing.
i shiver from my neck to ankles.
the way you kiss me, touch me.

my mind is in that section.
but my actions are in a different area.
i come back from dreaming.
sitting here in my room.

why don't you pick up your phone.
why do i repeat over and over.
economics is a cause of life.
my bloody hands are another.

the razor drops down on the floor.
the pink rug is splatter in red.
the color drips down from me.
i can't take this pain anymore.
so i pretend to unlock the door.

i cry endless moments.
this doesn't make since.
but the mind of actions I'm doing.
doesn't either so why not.

laying on the floor endless pain.
my body is floating like a pipe.
the liquid of blood is upon me.
while your standing above me.
crying your eyes out.
you keep on trying to shout.

but i can only see blur now.
my mind is going blank.
and i pass out in black.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Very good poem. You are a very gifted writer. 5/5
    -Vino

    Keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Kit Kat Katie

    I liked the first few stanzas for the form. You made your first point in 5 lines, and went to 4. Then you made a Dramatic change of words in your second 5 line stanza, but you seemed like you got tired of writing and just threw some words together in a few lines so you could end it. It was still good meaning though

  • 17 years ago

    by xX-jess-Xx

    Its sad but really makes you think. I really liked it!
    although, id watch out for

    "my heart is pounding a minute"

    because it doesnt really make sense (but that mite just be me!! :s) i wasnt sure if u meant ur heart was pounding just for a moment, or if it was pounding fast!

    neways other than that i absolutely loved it!

    xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Zach Armitage

    Dark. depressing, but really well written. youve managed to catch the emotion excelently. congrats

  • 17 years ago

    by blindedxxbyxxlove

    Beautifully written. Dark yet you made your point across in a lovely way...your a very talented writer, so keep it up!
    ~jenifer~