Never a Careless Girl

by ShootingStar179   Jan 30, 2007


Screaming as loud as I can,
It hurts yelling so loud,
It kills to scream and for you to not hear me,
Better than the pain inside,
So much better than feelings you make me hide.

Who is a friend who does not even worry about my fears?
Someone who makes me worthless,
I blame them for my tears,
Horrible how the feelings come back after I have wept once more,
Even more powerful than before.

Is it worth it?
You make me feel oppressed,
Not even a kind word is left for me in my despair,
It would be better for you to laugh in my face,
You make me feel like a terrible disgrace.

Think of this when your best friends leave you behind,
The one you left drowning in the tears,
I was the one who always cared,
You will not even remember me,
I was never the careless girl you wanted me to be.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    Good poem, so powerful and emotional. Beautifully written. Keep writing!!!!

    ^^5/5^^

  • 17 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    WOW that was very goo, sad, lots of emotional feelings , but a great write, wonderfully written and word choice was nice , good job, keep it up ,your friend Tracy d,,,,,5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow. Nicely done. It explained EXACTLY how I feel from my friends sometimes, but I usually just ignore the ones that I don't think are worth my time lol. Anyways, I really liked this poem and the emotion you put into it, you're a very interesting writer my Dear.

    "Think of this when your best friends leave you behind,
    The one you left drowning in the tears,
    I was the one who always cared,
    You will not even remember me,
    I was never the careless girl you wanted me to be."

    ^^ Loved that stanza.

    5/5 (:

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Aww. this poem is so sad. i don't know what to say...
    i don't mean to sound picky or anything, but i'm just giving advice---in the first stanza you used loud twice, find a synonym that's even stronger, or two to replace both of them

  • 17 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    I can totally relate to your poem, because something of the sort happened to me a little while ago. It's so full of emotion, so full of hurt. It was a very well written poem. The words you chose were excellent! Great write 5/5! And thank your for the comment on my poem!
    Much Love,
    <3 Danielle

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