The Lies I Believed [Acrostic]

by BrixGoesxRawr   Jan 30, 2007


Tears cascading down rosy red cheeks
Hopeless are what my land of dreams have now become
Everything disintegrating before my eyes

Loving you has turned my soul to black ash
I was naive, and gave you my heart
Ended with a cloud full of tears and lies
Sacrifices not of importance anymore

[I trusted you with everything I am]

Become confused, and numb; not able to feel
Every thing you said, I put my trust in
Love; I no longer understand what it is
I can't even look at you; it makes me sick
Everyone was right, but at least I learned
Vanish; is all that I want to do
Ego of yourself is so unbearable; you think you're perfect
Deranged, is what I'll forever be; but don't feel guilty

Brianna Carter
January 29, 2007.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Bri.. You are amazing writer.. and I hope you never forget that. .I think you probably already heard that tons of times.. but your choices of words, just simply flows. it so deep and yet soo touching.. I want you to keep up the good work.. good job 5/5 (i aint one of the downvoters! read it from ur profile lol)

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Amazing write! but have a lot of mistakes like every thing its one word. You put quilty instead of guilty if you just take sometime to re-read your poem and edit those little details the it would be so much better, but all together a great write and keep it up, you have what it takes!!
    nessa

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    I love this style of poetry! you did it really well. keep it up hun.
    Much love and many kisses,
    Bex

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    I'll start off with the good things. i really loved the idea of this poem and the first and second lines were amazing.

    and now for the bad... uhm you have a lot of mistakes... like every thing... its one word. you put quilty instead or guilty if you just take sometime to re-read your poem and edit those ilittle details the it would be sooooo much better.

    -liz

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I really liked this. It doesn't have the best flow, but overall it was a great read. 5/5

    marcella

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