Good job on your poem. Love hurts sometimes. Take care Cindy

I think its a very good poem and i will give it a 5/5 i love the emotion you brought out of it and how a lot of girls can probably relate. Although, i think it would be better if you used better words/writting then 'myne' and 'dude'

Your usage of 'slang' words is intentional, I suppose. (Okay then, I'll overlook that portion.) The emotions--pain, longing, envy, distress, and etc.--is quite evident throughout this piece; it's one of the major highlights, I must say. It was very heartfelt and sincere, having tugged my heart thoroughly. It is indeed something I could correlate with, although in a different sense. I usually feel the need of someone to be by my side, someone to comfort, and so on.... So, yeah, I adore this touching piece. ^_^ 5/5 Debbie

I really do hate slang in love poems it really throws off the entire read and reuins the emotion because when you use "z's" instead of "s's" it sounds funny and definitly trashes your poem. This piece was quite adoring none the less Good effort. ~mel