Comments : A Dangerous Mind

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    It's unusual. I like it, but there are parts I think the flow's a bit off or just different from the rest. One typo I noticed was this

    I go to sleep each night no knowing what you'll do

    it's NOT not NO. I did like the thoughts in each stanza as if she's constantly in fear for her life. And the concluding sentence was good. A good way to end the poem. Nice job!
    Charisma*

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "I never wanted to live in a way so blind
    Who would have known of your dangerous mind"

    Wow hun.. i've missed your work and the sheer power your words hold..
    That last couplet was just.. wow!
    lol, you've made me lose my words.
    Well done!
    5/5
    *Gem*