Deeper I Fall

by David Marshall   Jan 30, 2007


I'm hazed and falling in the oceans abyss.
I'm drowning with sorrow and floating in despair.
The bubbles surround me; I'm confused about this.
The waves push me down; I'm gasping for air.

The rain distorts the light shimmered surface.
The sea creatures squirm swiftly in fear.
My body falls deeper almost consumed.
I'm not sure if the bottom is anywhere near.

The currents gently move me around.
I float delicately without any motion.
My eyes shut, and my ears flood deluding the sound.
I fall deeper into this ocean.

The surface light dims with blue turning black.
My careless mind drifts with my soul.
I won't live; no I won't survive this fact.
The fact that I never had control.

I relax as the bubbles immediately stop.
My thoughts wander into eternal regret.
My lungs are filled with water, but my heart remains empty.
Images of you spring through my head.

I finally touch the bottom in the end.
My lifeless body rests without motion.
There's no way I could fall any deeper.
My body, my soul, my heart dead in this ocean.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Asher

    I liked it
    ((5))

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Your poems are great. not average. this poem created visuals for me to picture, and it was symbolic and realistic all at the same time. very well written check out some of my stuff though i dont compare. you are amazing

  • Very well written
    i didn't knows guys had so much emotion...
    ??
    xD

  • 17 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    I wanted to tell you how amazing I truly thought this poem was. It created visuals for me to picture, and it was symbolic and realistic all at the same time. I like how you could look at it as a literal drowning, or an emotional one. That was very good on your part. Thanks for entering!
    Charisma*
    Comment #1

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I've realized many on this site write about suicide, though yours is different in away. And that's why I think I enjoyed reading it. Overall I think it was a great piece.

    marcella