by Holly Jan 31, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
No one has noticed the pain...no one sees the tears...no one can help me through this time...I am left alone drowning in my fear all for something I am not even sure I've felt...the guilty party is love but it wasn't true so now I lay here and burn... |
You did a great job.... only two suggestions. one being to put it in lines instead of paragraphs... second being using a little more descripitive different words that flow more... some of the words just dont flow with the rest of the poem.... but you did a really great job otherwise... so keep up the great work. |