Comments : Life is what I fear..

  • 17 years ago

    by gasping for air

    You did a great job.... only two suggestions. one being to put it in lines instead of paragraphs... second being using a little more descripitive different words that flow more... some of the words just dont flow with the rest of the poem.... but you did a really great job otherwise... so keep up the great work.
    take care
    amanda