It is really a fabulous poem.
embellished with such feelings that can touch anyone's heart..
a continious overflow of pain could be felt from begenning till end..
really a good job..5/5

GOD BLESS

No, no hope for you what so ever! I'm joking, it wasn't bad actually, Could still use work, but I've read so, so much worse!!!
You had a mixture of descriptions - some that impressed me; some that did not.
What did impress was "No remover can erase it,
A black disease" and "A golden rule you set in stone" and "I have nothing left to offer, but support and my hand."
I wasn't keen on "you break my heart"and "cry over my darkest fear" and " look into my eyes and see into my soul." The reason is new ideas are more powerful.
I'll give you a little tip - if you write a description and think "that's good because I've read it before and it sounded good then" that's a bad move. Use a little imagination, let everything go, and feel what you're describing. What can you compare it to? The more "out there" the better generally.
The flow was a little off in places, but I think that's due to the inconsistancy of the line lengths.
Seriously though, it was quite good.
Just have a go with the tip I offered (if you want) and see what you come up with.
Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

Did you and your sister write this together?
It seems like two different voices and two different skills.
Great job, however, this is a silly error lmfao!

*bare alone, *
should be
*bear alone*
?

Ha ha!

Good job!
5/5
~stephen white

Omg. your the only poet that ive come across that i can really REALLY feel what you are portraying in your words. i just loved this one. i dont know what to say. it was perfect

much love and many kisses,
bex