by Katie Feb 1, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
I see you in my dreams often. |
by Rob Matt
Wow the emotion is super good. the rhyme scheme is off a bit with the stanzas with 5 lines, but its still good |
by Katie
Ytffgh |
Writing is so great for venting out thoughts....thanks so much for rrc on my poem :) |
by Connie
What a well written poem about such a personal loss. You expressed your feelings about the loss of this special person so well ~ thank you for sharing. |
by sibyllene
I hope writing this helped you sort out your feelings. I know it always helps me. I really like the concept you have in this poem about "pride" in the one you lost. I think the stanza about the pall-bearers was the strongest section. Your rhyme-scheme is fairly simple, but not so repetitive, and in this case, i htink that's actually a strength. use the content to determine the form of the poem, not the other way around. All in all, this was a heartfelt piece, not necessarily meant to impress people with tricky style - you just wanted to get your meaning across, and I think you succeeded well. My only grammar note is that "bare" should be "bear." Good work, and I hope this poem helped. |