Very sad poem....beautifully written

10!!

The more work I read of yours the more intense it becomes. Your soul shows through your work and is truly the heart of what makes it flow. This is beautiful. I am glad that I had the oppurtunity to read your work. Welcome to my favorites.
Love It...
Dixie

Oh I really love this one. Sad yet beautiful. Thank you by the way "deceit" I was trying to figure out how to spell it.. i tried looking it up ... but I finally gave up and stuck with disseat.. lol .. Beautiful poem! It's so sad. I'm repeating myself... I loved it how you put Broken in but changed the word after. I thought that was really cool. Again your rhyming and vocab was amazing. Magneficient! Loved this part:

... I went to highlight my favorite part... and I ended up highlighting the whole thing.. lol ..

Wonderful Write!

5/5

Cant explain how much I liked this poem, from start to finish...brought back some many forgotten emotions...Great job Rachel...5/5

Love it.. 5/5

This is a really special poem. I really like it a lot, and the rhythm of it is so.. pefect. It was fun to read, too. Amazing poem!

Good poem. even with the repetition of broken i couldnt imagine it any other way. you are exelent at showing the emotion in a poem. great work.

I like ur poem. its G-R-E-A-T! KEEP IT UP! CHECK OUT MY POEMS SOMETIME.FROM ALINA

OMG!!! That was sooo amazing!!

"Broken spirit, love of sorrow,
stolen now is my tomorrow.
Broken life, love is lost,
Broken now and that's the cost. "

These were my favorite lines. I'm not sure of the connotations you meant to convey, but i took "broken spirit, love of sorrow" to mean that although we know the fragility of our hearts, we give them away anyway. Wonderful writing.

Wow it was awesome, so deep and the rythem was great. the flow was perfect and i just i loved it. i gave you a 5/5 and added you to my fave's, maybe if you have some time you could check my poems out. i'd love to hear what you think.

I like the poems, you lost the flow for a minute but i think you picked it up nicely.

Its pretty cool I got to addmite it. Im not so good at writing short poetry. It starts out short but ends alot longer than expected. Ha

I loved this!!!

This poem is amazing <3

This is so good. i luv it <333

Omg this poem is absolutely wonderful i love it!!!! 5/5!

Take care

OMG I LOVE THIS POEM.. SHOULD KEEP WRITING

WOW!!!! Now that was hot and I really like the way this flowed and the set up of the poem. I can relate to this. Well done

Awwww

soooo sweet and sad at the same time