by Dark Demise Feb 2, 2007
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
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by Dark Demise
Thank you for all of your comments, and suggestions of things I need to work on, I really apreciate. |
It's a pretty good poem, but it kind of breaks down into different things. The flow is good and the rhyming is good also. Kind of need to work on it, though. Good job! |
by DJ
This poem was awesome, love the vocab and structure, flowed nicely. good work. |
Powerful... I love dark poetry, and your dark poems are truly excellent, very unique. I like the choice of words in this one, you painted some very vivid images in my mind. |
This is a good poem! The ending bit was quite strong, that was my favorite part. The rhythm was twitchy, but you used a nice broad vocab. Always a great tool to have, if not overused. |