I like it a lot.....it a good poem(this isnt Jordan cross, its her friend by the way) it sounds like something i would write.......i think you should do more of this styal because you seem to have a talent in it

Lol im kinda in love with your poems!! Lol
put moree on!! i wanna read more!!

I liked the poem. The title of the poem should have been something different though. It didn't seem to match the rest of the flow of the poem. I think that it's an awesome poem.

5/5

Such a great poem. So many points to make, yet you still know all of them. They are amazing. This is really good. Love it!

Loved Reading This Poem. A Very marvelous, grim piece. Beautifully Done..Ty for your comments as well. :) 5/5.

An eceptional piece Double D. When I saw the title I though this would a poem decribing a color. Instead you show us what you see when you gaze into the void. Wonderful work.

Keep it up
Jason.

Hmmm. I like it. A poem wonderfully written, truly deserving a 5.

I see a lil Linkin Park, Disturbed, and Mudvayne in this....hmm, wonder what new musical mastermind will come from these lyrics....i liked it

Interesting poem. there are several grammatical things that i could point out, if you're looking for that kind of critique. just let me know

"Every new Skrying moment, looking threw the scope,
Glancing over you're shoulder for a slight chance of some hope,
I feel that all these thoughts make me deranged,
Paranoia isn't something thats easily tamed,
Just my little mystical perception I keep,
Shudder at the hearing of the horror from the deep"

^You are without a doubt a powerful writer. You have a strong sense of rhythm, and arguably, its standard rises next to something by Muse (which makes the poem SO much cooler :]). Anyway, you use extended vocabulary which inevitably enhances the piece as a whole; you've constructed a strong and engaging piece. Well done Eric and keep it up :].x

Awesome poem!! i loved it!!

Wow, you're great, yo. ^-^ this poem was originally going to be like a 4.... but then I read...I feel that all these thoughts make me deranged,
Paranoia isn't something thats easily tamed,
Just my little mystical perception I keep,
Shudder at the hearing of the horror from the deep
Someday the tainted life style will fade,
And we can all Stop living a charade,

And now, I think it deserves more. ^-^ SSo, 5/5 hun.

=] Peace, yo.

A very thought provoking, and well written dark poem

Nice, man. Nice. :)

I loved this!!
The wording was a pleasure to read and the imagery was fantastic.
You really did a wonderful job on this.

Excellent poem! Very deep feelings. Great! Take care Cindy

This feels a lot like a rap and very wonderful at that! 5/5

Great job this deserves 10/5 i loved it

Awesome thanks for comment.. this is a good poem.. keep it up.

Love this poem very deeep .....keep up the good work

I loved it...so deep and dark...5/5