Great poem! You write such powerful pieces. I loved your rhymes especially in this one. Great read 5/5

marcella

Excellent job on this! you really have talent. this was such an awesome poem. it was really deep and meaningful. 5/5

~Kristina

I thought this poem was good and if you fixed some spelling mistakes it could be great

Nice job I loved the flow and the rhyming

I like it! it has a different style, but it's still veryy well written. Good job, especially on the rhyming. 5/5
<3

Sometimes you can create amazing pieces after a period of writers block. it was wicked! i love the words you use in all your poetry. beautiful

much love and many kisses,
bex

It was really intesting and eliminated vocabulary
Good job

I really liked this poem it was really really good haha sorry i am not the best commenter but yea it is good 5/5 from me

Wow! I really enjoyed reading this one. I don't know it was just so dark, and you used a lot of great descriptive words. You are indeed a great writer, and I can't was to read more of your work!

Oh and

"And just sit down for a moment... and let are selfs degrade."
^^are selfs should be ourselves

Just thought I'd correct that one little mistake you made. Great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Dark and a bit confusing.
The rhythm was a bit here and there.
but you have a very high vocabulary and you should ALWAYS use this to your advantage.
3.5

4.5*

I really enjoyed this! You are such a talented writer, I cannot understand why it has a 4.3 rating, it is a 5/5 for me!

This is a good poem! The ending bit was quite strong, that was my favorite part. The rhythm was twitchy, but you used a nice broad vocab. Always a great tool to have, if not overused.

Keep it up.
Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Powerful... I love dark poetry, and your dark poems are truly excellent, very unique. I like the choice of words in this one, you painted some very vivid images in my mind.
The fourth stanza is my favorite one.
You did great job with rhyming, too.
The ending line is very effective.
5/5 from me

This poem was awesome, love the vocab and structure, flowed nicely. good work.

It's a pretty good poem, but it kind of breaks down into different things. The flow is good and the rhyming is good also. Kind of need to work on it, though. Good job!

.:CiNdY:.

Thank you for all of your comments, and suggestions of things I need to work on, I really apreciate.