Now this is impressive. I appreciate how difficult acrostics are to write because you have to keep in with the form as well as making it sound good. You did this vey well.
Your use of language in this was very strong, the type to show the reader the event, rather than telling as most poems on here unfortunatly do.
The rhyme was good, a lot more original rhymes than in the other poem I've just read.
The only minor critisism I have is for the first line of the last stanza, it made me stumble a bit. The rest of the poem has a constant rhythm or meter and that line slips out of it. As I keep rereading the poem it feels there should be a couple more syllables in there. You may want to reread it and see if you can spot it. Or it may just be me...it's just a suggestion either way.
Thanks for sharing, this is a great piece.

Very well done and I Believe the following Verse's are some of my favorite:

Vendetta between right and wrong
Ends with hugs and kisses
Reconcile with your inadequacy
Intoxicating bliss
Endulge in the simplicity

Very well done. I think that you Deserve a Five. That is why I gave you it.

I'll keep and eye out for your up and coming poems.

Best of Luck,
DS

Nice. The words nicely formed a beautiful poem.

A very good poem, but i'm not sure if it's just me right now or what, but i'm not entirely sure what the poem is describing, i'll come back a little later and reread it.

Oh wow. this was just superb. acrostic poems are very difficult to write and i commend you for doing an eloquent job on writing this.

5/5

Great job.. acroctics are hard.. but im a big fan.. this one turned out very nicely.. really really great word choice.. the flow was flawless.. beautiful poem

Wow. EXCELLENT! JOB!!! i reallly like this poem. i love how you used words that you dont hear everyday. it made the poem perfect!! and the title.. its amazing. great job. just one thing. undone and wrong.. dont rhym i mean unless you wanted it that way. but from the rest of the rhym sceme it would make sense if they rhymed.. so idk

but all in all 5/5!!

Excellent work!!! i loved the flow, 5/5 from me, keep writing

Small poem, but very strong. Incredibly well written.
Good job.
5/5
~Stephen White

This is an amazing piece of work. Eloquent, descriptive, exquisite, and perfectly formed. It conveys a meaning with a certain grace and splendor that I've not seen too often. The cadence and flow were perfect for this piece as well. Wonderful job. *5/5

Wow this is amazing .. good job

I think its good nice job!
lots of big words lol but its a good poem 5/5
*kaila*

Nice : }

Wow awsome poem! makes me wnt to put my mind...lik somewhere...haha

Really interesting and sometimes i just feel like this...just kidding:)but you really expressed it really good,well done

This was frikken amazing!!
I absolutely loved this.
The detail you put into this amazed me.
The wording you chose was spectacular.
Excellent work.

Wow how do u pact all the emotion into such short poems wow ur so talented!!

Nicely done. Yeah you're deffinatly going in my favorites. YOu have awesome writing skills! Keep it up!
God Bless 5/5
Thank you so much for the comment and vote.

<3Tayy

*aplauds* Well done! Your poems have such a diverse vocabulary in them.

Again the flow was awesome. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

Acrosstic's can be tricky, but you did a fine job on this peice.
It was discriptive, it flowed well and it got the message across.
I really enjoyed reading it.
well done,
Elaine.