Curse of Tomorow

by shawn   Feb 3, 2007


In my mind is grief and sorrow
For frozen little droplets
Will bring blizzards tomorrow.

In my mind everything was going so well
It was all planned out
But now has gone to hell.

In my mind it was just a short ride.
It might have paid off
But for what, the cost of my hide.

In my mind I did not care
I just wanted to see her
But I guess I can no longer go there.

In my mind it was not clear
I knew what I wanted
But they said can you not hear?

In my mind I drifted away
From this so called life
I was in total dismay.

As I wandered back to my room.
I shut the door
And tripped over a broom.

I said to myself can this day get any worse?
Then I remembered
That my birthday is a Curse.

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow such a different poem then I'm used to reading. I've never once thought that anyone could think of their birthday as a curse, but apparently some people do. I really liked how most verses started off the same way "in my mind" while ending with a creative metaphore. The ending verse was the most powerful by far. Nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by P.oemless

    Wow... that was deep. But the rhymes were a little obvious. I almost think it would be better if it didn't rhyme.

  • 17 years ago

    by e LIZ a beth

    I realy like the idea of this poem. and the title. but i think there are some flowing problems and it seems to me as if some of it was forced. the poems idea seems meaningful and heartfelt though. so great job.

    -liz

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    Very good poem. i liked it a lot. the only thing is, when i got toward the end about the broom part i kind of chuckled, [and i felt really bad] because the next line made me really sad.

    nice way to change the emotions on me.

    great poem nontheless. wonderful write
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by omen

    The first line was wonderfuly done to hint at the horrors to follow, the rest of the poem was well done, with a few rough parts, but the ending did a beautiful job of pulling it all together, good work!
    omen

Read All Comments (12)

More Poems By shawn