Uhm i really like the idea of this poem but to me it seems more of a really short story full of questions rather then a poem telling a story alreadly lived or written. uhm i see where the rhym is but its a little off. a lot of it is forced. but dont think its bad i just think you need to edit it some and keep trying. may i suggest a rhyming website. you can find them on goodle by typing in 'rhyming words' or a theasorous.. its a great tool.

keep trying though it'll get better i promis.

I liked this. It has originality, since most poems are written from the opposite point of view. Some rhymes were forced a little, but overall it was a great read. 5/5

marcella