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by Braeden Monks Feb 4, 2007 category : Sadness, depression / about depression
With every drink i die with every swallow i cry with every wink is a lie with every laugh, i sigh You watch me slip, You wish me luck. You give me a tip, You wish me luck. Where were you, when i called? Where were you, When i began to fall. You let me down, Hid yourself. You watch me drown, Miss myself. You have good intentions, for yourself. You have good intentions, Im living in a hell. Miss me when I'm gone? Forget it. Miss me when I'm gone What is it? You talk with no help, what about me! You sulk with no hell, what about me! I'll stop with one thought who are you? Final thoughts Who are you!
by Tormented
Again a very nice poem Nice reptition Nice rhymes Liked the last stanza alot! Only critique i have is that try not to use too many, "you's in a poem. Otherwise great write! 4.5/5 Keep SMiling `*-Tormented