Who are you!

by Braeden Monks   Feb 4, 2007


With every drink i die
with every swallow i cry
with every wink is a lie
with every laugh, i sigh

You watch me slip,
You wish me luck.
You give me a tip,
You wish me luck.

Where were you,
when i called?
Where were you,
When i began to fall.

You let me down,
Hid yourself.
You watch me drown,
Miss myself.

You have good intentions,
for yourself.
You have good intentions,
Im living in a hell.

Miss me when I'm gone?
Forget it.
Miss me when I'm gone
What is it?

You talk with no help,
what about me!
You sulk with no hell,
what about me!

I'll stop with one thought
who are you?
Final thoughts
Who are you!

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  • 17 years ago

    by Tormented

    Again a very nice poem
    Nice reptition
    Nice rhymes
    Liked the last stanza alot!
    Only critique i have is that try not to use too many, "you's in a poem.
    Otherwise great write!
    4.5/5

    Keep SMiling
    `*-Tormented