As You Walk

by .K.i.T.t.Y.   Feb 4, 2007


Walking down an old gravel road,
Barefoot and in pain,
Looking for the other side,
Where the road is smooth and comforting.

As you walk,
Scars begin to form,
From the stones,
With jagged edges adorned.

You are walking,
To find the road,
To journey upon,
With the one of heart's old.

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this poem was a bounce off of what my friend wrote. i got bored.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Lori Lee

    This was real good. only, I didn't see it as walking down a road. I felt like it had a more metaphorical purpose to it. but either way, it was awesome. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Once again nicely done. Maybe you should try more rhyming in your poems. It will just give the poem a flow. But still a really good poem. God Bless 5/5

    <3Tayyy

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    It was so smooth, and really brings memories of walking on a rocky road,
    thx so so so much for the comments, they really mean alot to my poems (and me)
    luv gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Its a little bit bumpy but loved the whole idea... keep it up !!! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hmmm. Very interesting. Not cliche at all, though it started to lean that way. But, I really like it. Great job.

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

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