Wow... for only being 13 at the time this is really amazing. a lot of my friends dont realize the consequences of cutting, if they hit too deep or hit the wrong spot when theyre just trying to get rid of the pain their life could be over forever. i really liked the last part, because although it sucks to say it is true that its their own fault if they commit suicide, and it wont be fair to their family or friends.

5/5
Allanah

Good job. expecially for a thirteen year old.

it starts off strong and with a nice flow. but then it gets a little sketchy.. in terms of rhyming. like no more and anymore. technically they're the same thing and it looks like the rhym was forced.

and then in the third line, there it says the knife blade. it doesnt really flow. and a knife is a blade so if you took out the 'blade' in that sentence it would flow much better.

and in the fourth line i think it would souhnd better without 'it' in in the begining.

all in all the idea of the poem is good. but im sure if you read over it a lot in a very sceptical state you'll find you can make it much better.

great job :D
-liz

Excellent peom, i liked it, good write at 13. 5/5

Cute poem.. very descriptive and good flow.. a very enjoyable read

This is very well written. The only thing that I didn't really feel i guess is the word i'm looking for lol is this line
"but losing your sanity is all that's gained." it seems contradicting, but they may just be me. Overall I thought it was good read. 5/5

marcella

Wow very strong poem i really like it...keep up the good work Mandz

Wow this is an amazing poem. Especially if you wrote it back then when you were thirteen, your talent is immensly incredible hun. I understand how you were feeling at this time. The frustration is portrayed well through imagery, and I went through the same with several close friends of mine. Wonderful job. 5/5

I tink this is brilliant and i do the same if you know what i mean :|

I think this is brilliant and i go through the same thing :|

Thank you i love the last line, its such a strong poem but i did not expect the last line, awesome work 5/5

I love the depth and emotion you put into it. I didn't really expect it to turn out like it did in the end! Great poem! 5/5

~Shae

Great Poem, Really Good For Only 13

Thanks for the comment

Ouch.. harsh lol.. but i enjoyed it a lot.. the flow was great as well as the rhymes... it was a wonderful poem..

Wow.. This was amazing I really loved the last part. It had a strong flow. The rhymes were very good. It held a lot of emotion. I can sadly relate to this a lot. I think you have a lot of talent. Great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Wow you have a great talent, wonderful job, great flow and wording 5/5

Awesome poem! Extremly impressive for a 13 yr old. you get a 5/5. I'm adding you to my favorites list

Yes well portrayed...
your friend is lucky to have you. i hope everything went okay...
5/5

The flow is a little off, but an amazing poem! i really liked it. wel done hun.
much love and many kisses,
bex

Very strong poem i really like it 5/5