I liked it, it was really nice.

I did enjoy this poem, but you wanted honesty. So here's a couple tips for you:

-Watch your grammar. You mixed up 'is' and 'are' in a few places, and there were some other parts that weren't really correct. If you spell everything out in regular English, rather than slang, then perhaps it will be easier for you.

-The content was slightly repetitive. I'd suggest trying out some metaphors, and maybe use some imagery to make it a little more interesting.

Great effort though, seriously. With a little work you'll be writing like a pro! haha. But seriously, I found this to be an enjoyable poem, and your feelings were very clearly stated. Nice job. :)

Thx 4 da comments nd honesty =]

Good effort...you have deep feelings and passions yearning to come out....keep it up and you will get there ...a good friend of mine said onece " consistancy of paractice is the secret to success" so keep on practicing this art...also, plz read my recent poems"Arabian sands "crown of thorns""my tears" vote and comment thanks you so much