I liked it, a lot.
The second stanza, the last line was a bit too long.
BUT, this is a song.
Therefore, when sung it would probably sound good.
Lol.

Overall You did a great job. :]
I liked it alot.
And, the repitition, too. :]
5/5

I didn't get that she was loosing her dad to drugs, for me it felt more like her dad left her mum and her mum had a terminal illness... but it doesn't matter what I think - poems can be interpretted in all different ways by different people depending on their backgrounds etc. You did really well - it really did hurt my heart to see how pleading this little girl was to get her daddy back. Well done. 5/5