The story of my broken heart

by Taylor Loves Fishes   Feb 5, 2007


I get a call one stormy evening,
from a good friend.
he tells me to be quiet as he calls u
after a a deep conversation...
he asks you if u like me,

and what do you say?
ewwww no way!
i knew you didnt like me but how could you!
i love you more than anyone i've ever loved
and you think of me as ew?

i hate you
i hate you!
you\'ve broken my heart many times,
but this was the worst!!
i hate you!

0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 17 years ago

    by Kelly

    *Before you read this, it's not to be mean.

    You're a good writer, believe me, you are. You have a good base and good ideas, you're creative. You sound great.

    But...part of that is looking good too. What I mean is grammar and punctuation. The chatspeak doesn't make you look any better("u" and "ur").

    I used to write on a site for constructive criticism. One of the things people used to do to help each other was have something called a reg. I still don't quite know what it stood for, but basically it was one of the author's regular readers who volunteered. the author would send them the writing via email before posting it, make corrections(usually in a different color), and send it back.

    It's just an idea and again, I'm not trying to be mean.

  • 17 years ago

    by lovely

    Brava!