^I agree, it's too bad that there are so many people in the world that feel like this poem. Keep it up

I am very impressed. Quite a poem. A lot of depth. Nice length of the lines. Check out your spelling though. This poem was wonderful. It is a sad truth and you expressed it well. Nice.

I likey the poem a lot!! buuuttttt yes there is always a buttt. in the last line of the second stanza i think it would flow better if you used she's insttead of she is. and in the second line of the fourth stanza i think its supposed to be who not whom.

but other then that great job hun!!

I loved it! itz so sad wat ppl do 2 get noticed but i really felt da emotion it flowed good 2! 5/5

This poem has a great flow The content contains a fact that is often overlooked. I think the poem reflects how beauty and charm also seduces those who posses it to get the attention and power which comes with it. I believe I have witnessed this times in my life, though it took me many years to understand.... I love this poem

This poem was preaty good. I liked the breaking up word it was something that I rarely see in poetry, a nice change from the typical poems. The poem itself was very interesting. I've always felt bad for people like that I myself try my best to give everyone a fair shot but its not always done. Well nice job and thanx for sharing this with us.

I loved this!
The imagery was great and I thought it flowed well.
The pain of the girl was easy to see.
Good luck in the contest!

I hope you won youre contest because this poem was fantastic, it flowed perfectly and the rhyming was impecable 5/5

Really good poem, I loved the rhyming. it flowed very very well. But to tell you the truth I dont get the whole certin words need to be broken... otherwise nothing bad that i can say

keep it up

Great poem, written really greatly. keep up the great work . you are truly talented.

[Damn]. I love it.
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I love this poem... its so true... this is exactly what some girls are going through now-a-days

Great write. It's sad but very true, what some will do to feel like they belong. I thought it had a great flow. 5/5

Pretty good poem girl

'Cheep' is spelled 'Cheap' (2nd stanza)

'And insecure she hides it well'
Weird line.

The word 'barf' in the 2nd stanza doesnt fit the poem. It's not a word you would use in poetry. You should replace it with something else.

4/5

This was such a good poem..i really liked ur topic and how the girls not just a h o e but she does it because she needs to...there are a few spelling mistakes in this like \"she\'s\" should be \"she\'d\" in the 6th stanza and im not sure if you meant that \"cheep\" in the 2nd stanza to be \"cheap\"..but yea..thats it...there was nothing else wrong with it:)...and im not sure why the word breaks were there cause i could read it fine without them

Again, in this piece you tie the first and last stanza together. I really do love that. It works so nicely. Your flow, rhyme scheme, and cadence are all perfect. I see no flaw in those. There are a couple places where you are one or two syllables off... but it certainly does not make a difference. I particularly liked this stanza:

But no one ever reaches out
No one gives her the time of day
Nobody wants to be her friend
Or to tell her to stop her ways

Very nice. *5/5

Good poem, it is horrible the things people think that have to do to be noticed, I loved it :) 5/5

What a sad truth it is , some girls will do anything for attention ...............keep up the great work

Excellent job! So very sad. The emotion in this really cries out. Makes you stop and think. Take Care Cindy