Not never carla and i thought this poem was great it really expressed somthing i dont know what it is but u xpressed it.= ) you should check out some of my stuff.

Cory

U and ryan r going out!!!!! u never told me

AAAAAAAAH!!!!!
i read that like 3 times!
awesome....really loved it!
it has an almost perfect flow...
such short sentences...and perfect meaning and abcb rhyme...
a definite 5/5 from me....id give a 10 if i could...=]

Wow....i read this last night and felt like reading it again...(dont ask)
i loved it...
really...very few comments..
like "inside and out" kinda breaks the flow
maybe if u change it to "inside out"
it'll be better
but all in all..a definite 5/5
=D
oh and i really like how its made up of short lines and flows very..very smoothly..=]

Omg
this is my Fav

OK, so i think this is officially your best poem, i don't really know how you wrote such a great peice and i feel a bit jelouse. you know now how i feel about it, i love it... just thought I'd say that! :]
ok so i kinda coppied your words but so what they really describe how i fell about it.
lovely read:~)Sam

I love this poem keep up the great work

Well. I was a bit disappointed it didn't turn out to be all darkish and gloomy, but it turned out to be quite nice. I especially like the first two stanzas.

"Slit a wrist
Watch it bleed
It's all you want
And all you need"
Those last two lines made me pause. I've seen it often, but it's one of those things that always hit hard. At some points, it's kinda true for everyone, no?

"You deeply want
To end your life"
I think this was the only thing in the poem that I didn't like. It's too... blatantly put?

"Slit a wrist
Not too deep"
That came as a very unexpected surprise, and a pleasant one, too. It holds hope, but also a sort of neutrality that is kind of cold, but also comforting.

A job well done.

I can relate to this piece. I love the way it rhymes, it seems to suit the poem.. The message is clear and simply written.