You know things are bad

Omg that was an amazing read... and its something alot of people on this site can relate 2 ...great job!! if i could have gave it more then 5 i would have

That last stanza was so powerful and I admire that,

You know things are bad
When you rely on a blade,
When the everflowing blood
Makes your life start to fade.
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This piece I read over and over again it drew so much attention. 'when you rely on a blade'
I love that line. This is the best poem I've read from you so far....Besides the 'I'm sorry mum' Poem. xx

I like the technique you used to repeat the very first line in every stanza (I forget what its called though . . .). Also, the "You know it's bad when" is sort of a pun in and of itself, which just gives more character to the poem.

Brilliantly done.

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Oh wow. That's great Lauren! Far out... Brilliant, seriously

This is exactly how i feel. as i was reading this, it reminded me of me so much.. it scary. i lvoe how u wrote this tho. u have alot of talent. so much emotion was put into this poem and it shows. great job.. keep it up
take care
luve angie