Wow, i'm not kidding, you can really understand the girl, especially me, cause i had an anorexic friend, but me and some others, convinced her she was perfect the way she was, this was really sad, and you can feel the conflict of choices.
luv gabriella

Awe this is sad ... but speaks the truth ... i like it and i say don't change it one bit .... it really puts out what you wanted to say

I go anorexic off and on.. its like i cant stand who i am and wut i look like. i just cant help it. but this is a really good poem. its very scary tho... to think that you can die from anorexia.. well good job. i like it
take care
luve angie

Hey to yeah thankx so much for sharing that poem... wow i am crying..
i just love the fact that you are writing this to make others aware of what ANA can do to you.. It spoke to me allot..

take care

Lovely Bones

It's sad that so many cases end in death. I knew a boy, yes a boy, with anorexia. He was called fat by his peers (but he wasn't) so he did just what the girl did in this poem...luckily though he got help and started to put weight back on, but to see him go from healthy to thin and obsessed with his weight was sickening.
Anyway...your poem. It's impact is great (if you didn't already guess by me comment so far).
It's simple so everyone will be able ot understand it...
I will say though in the first stanza you repeat "perfection," it's kind of distracting to have it twice there, so if you could find an alternitive to one of those, it may sound better.
Thanks for sharing this on EDA week.

The second stanza is a little choppy, find a way to make it flow better

in the third stanza i think its supposed to be she loated (at) what she saw ,but im not positive

maybe think of a way to shorten the fifth stanza to 4 lines, the fifth stanza was my favorite

i like this poem, i like how its not about every typical depressed teenager on this site. i think with some improvment it could be one of your better poems.

could you do me a favor, could you read my poem "The Love that Got Away" my teacher told me it was breath taking and i want to see if she was just being nice

This was a very well written poem that brought out awareness. Anorexia can be a very fatal disorder and you brought that up. All the symptons and all the effects. You are a very intelligent person and I'm glad you recognize the language within poetry. Very nicely done.

Wow, this is so sad my heart breaks for all those who think they have to reach perfection by hurting themselves,
i think it's great that you are raising awareness for ANA keep up the great work

Wow this poem was great, soo sad and full of emotions :( I have a really close friend who was bulimic and now shes become anorexic, I jst wish she can read this to know how things can end up, but no matter wat I promised her I will be by her side all the way until recovery ;).

Wasn't as good as the other one, but it again was nicely written. this was a good topic to approach. i like the personification you gave out, using "nicknames" of the disorders. 5/5.

You have such a good taklent, please never stop writing. thuis poem should be published, its so well written and it definatly does reach out to you x x xx x tak e kare x x x x

Wow, love, this was great. 5/5 def. thanks for your input on "Mia's Little Fighter". I know that there's a chance that something like this could happen to me, but I can't stop until I've reached My idea of perfection.

As a senior member of P&Q I can vote for poems for the weekly poetry contests. Write something great and if it's impressing i will vote for it love.

Good job