Excellent job! The story you have put to verse held my attention from begining to end. I love the messeges you add to alot of your poems. 5/5 Take Care Cindy

"So when I broke your heart it shattered your soul"

Is this about a first love? That very line caught me off guard because it seemed to be written for me. That's how I felt the day my first and only boyfriend broke up with me. It hurt, killed like you wouldn't believe it. Now, things are good though, we're great friends....too bad you didn't get to be great friends with her...great write, keep it up!

Sad story put to rhyme. Nice job!

What a great story put to verse.....you do so well this kind of fictional write...kept my attention throughout. Well done! 5/5

Wow ....... huni that is a great poem.it deeply moved me well done xlisa