This was really good. A lot of emotion and easy to relate to. It didn't have much of a rhyme scheme but it was still a great read. Poems don't always have to rhyme... I do have a suggestion though, "he told her someday he would make her his wife", try breaking that line into two. 5/5

marcella

Sometimes love just isn't what it seems to be, it happens more often then not. Greta job 5/5

Wow bittersweet imagery! i loved this you are a great poet! and i also loved the flow very much

Wow I love this. . .Its soo packed full of emotion its overwhelming. . .I love that last line, it brings it all together nicely. . .

Loved it
Laura
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I really enjoyed this, the ending was very strong and you had a great idea throughout the entire poem. you did a wonderful job writing this, the flow was great, 5/5