I liked it alot 5/5
--josh

This poem was wonderful it was full of emtions and it was very true we really dont see beautiful people past their beauty and most of them have so many hidden secrets, i loved it 5/5

Wonderful write.. the flow is great and it tells a story.. which is always a plus.. very good choice of words.. once again.. and i loved the ending.. it perfectly summed up the poem

Wow. this has to be my favourite of yours so far. its simply brilliant. i love it!! i wouldnt change a thing. well done.
Much love and many kisses,
Bex

It was interesting; the look into a life of someone that has it all but is broken inside, a understandable and very true story. Very well written and I would not change this poem any cause you might ruin it that way. Great great great poem and I will finish these up soon for you, sorry for the delay, I am sick sick sick and working and yea my life is a little full, great poem I enjoyed it a lot it was a great write and out of cliché enough for me !!! you continue to write and critique its your game now!!

I really enjoyed this poem! You used such a wide variety of language and the total usage of your techniques just made this poem flawless. 5/5

So vigorous with = i don't think that is the appropriate word... maybe so "perfect".... or maybe even "persuasive" ?!

But does anyone really know the truth about this girl? = no. (hee hee!)

She acts flawless, because that’s who they want her to be= She always acts flawless, it's what they wish to see

the right track= good line, but i dunno... just something pecuiliar about it...

I really like this poem.. originally unoriginal.
Great job.

5/5
~Stephen White

Wow.
I, myself feel like this at times. & there are many more teenage girls that do too. Quite heartbreaking actually. The flow was flawless & the story that was told was amazing, Keep writing! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Flawless job baby girl! Excellent write. Don't worry, I just don't see the golden heart of Bri being something people won't except, unless they are just an idoit or something, and in that case who needs 'em right?